Just at a quick glance here are my first thoughts.
The first 4 have that “instagram” look. I really don’t care for it.
I don’t find the kite image interesting, it’s plain.
“Hannah 13” Not a good background, don’t like her hair over her face
Hannah 12: overexposed background, bad angle makes her look short.
Hannah 11: Bad expression on her face…she looks like she blinked as you took the photo. Don’t like where she is placed in the photo.
Hannah 10: Lens flair on her shoulder, not sure what’s going on with her hand, looks like you snapped it in the middle of her posing.
Hannah 9: Like her face and smile, seems a little dark. Would have cropped in tighter on her face.
Hannah 8: Cute, would have liked it better if you would have cropped below the sky. The sun is distracting and draws my eyes to it.
Hannah 7: Squatting is a no-no. IMO it always looks like they are having a bathroom break…
Hannah 6: She kinda has crazy eyes here, like she opened them wider than normal.
Hannah 5: Not sure what is going on with her eye the darkness makes it look weird…also looks like you over exposed and then tried to fix the highlights…resulting in greyish tones with no detail
Hannah 4: Cute expression. Her legs look orange, and she has a tree growing out of her head. If the background was blurred more it would have helped that. Shooting at a longer focal length would have made the background look better
Hannah 3: One of your better images. I like the catch-lights in her eyes. Maybe crop a little off the left to put her more on the thirds line.
Hannah 2: Background looks better on this one. Hand across stomach is awkward.
Hannah 1: My eye is drawn to the bright part of the rock. Bent elbow and hand look awkward.
Ane’s Feet: Just a strange shot overall.
cake shot: Too shallow DOF, too dark, uninteresting
Sweet Ane: bad lighting. I really really dislike wrinkled backgrounds!
Smashing and dashing: Bad lighting, bad background
Ane cake smash: Bad lighting, bad background, not a fan of messy mouth closs-ups
Ane: Bad background, bad lighting, weird angle
Dad: not terrible lighting, his expression is odd.
Sunset: Nothing interesting just looks like a snapshot taken with a cell phone.
img_6084: better image. 30mm is not a good focal length for portraits. Try 50-70mm at that type of crop.
img_6120: Looks like a snapshot, bad background
img_6046: background too busy, not an awesome BW conversion
img_6036: Better image. Wish there was a little more space above her head. same comment about focal length.
Like I said…just a quick glance at each. I am sure someone will give you a much more in depth critique.
to see more information about focal lengths check out: http://www.lesjones.com/www/images/posts/stepheneastwood-tile1.jpg